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Re: The Voice that Lies
I absolutely love this! Really, the only thing I can find to critique is the last line for the last two stanzas - "Only bring more pain" and "The Voice, ...
Mar 31, 2015 -
Re: The Crowning
A little cryptic, but it sounds as though this is a poem about a drunk driver who is utterly debauched and died after driving into a lake or some such ...
Feb 8, 2015 -
Re: Empty Draft
This is good, though it has a couple of problems. You have a couple problems with spelling and homophones - "despare" is spelled "despair", and the line "You see straight ...
Feb 4, 2015 -
Re: Two of my Poems
Hey, Vandria (cool name, by the way =3) Ok, I'm going to write two reviews for this (one for each poem) just so that you don't have to read one ...
Nov 4, 2009 -
Re: Live Dream Live
This is good! =3 One of the problems I had with it is the format - normally people write poems and songs like this: i should tell u about everything ...
Nov 4, 2009 -
Re: Birthing Complications
This was good - no, great! I love the concept of it, and how funny it was. XD The beat for me was practically non-existent, but that didn't stop me ...
Oct 22, 2009 -
Re: Crevice
This is good! I had a problem with finding the rhythm, or beat, to it. It just wasn't a very clear one. However, some of the rhyming was great! Whereas ...
Oct 22, 2009 -
Re: Your Doppelgänger and You
Black Night Werecat, to get the a with the umlaut above it (ä), hold down the ALT button on your keyboard, and press 0228 on the number pad. If you're ...
Jun 5, 2009 -
Re: what if much of a want was to know?
First of all, before I continue with this review, I'd like to mention the 2:1 ratio rule - in order to post a story or poem of your own, you ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: Faith
Snoink is right - you should try to add a little more power to you poem. It's a really great poem, the concept is awesome, however, you really shouldn't be ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: They say-I say. Rewritten
Omg, I totally agree with this poem! I feel like this all the time! Just one question though: I'm not sure if I understood this poem correctly, because in the ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: Deadwood
Geez, June, leave a little reviewing for the rest of us! :D Just kidding! Anyway, ignore the fact that Juniper has given you a review for the time being. I'm ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: What if...?
I loved this poem! Unfortunately, I couldn't find anything wrong with it other than the things that June pointed out. Well, actually, I did think that the flow of the ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: Poetry
I love your poem. Here are some of the mistakes: from when I rise [s]to[/s] 'till the dawn birds fall drowsy, shouldn't it be 'till, and not to? Here: Not ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: It's pissing me off, but i think i love you
I love the concept of the poem, but the way you word it is kind of... well, to be quite frank, it sucks. I'm sorry if that's harsh, but the ...
Apr 30, 2009
